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October 17th, 2011

Winter

Posted by julieengel in Uncategorized

I’m really awful at writing poetry, especially sappy love poems. I couldn’t really think of anything to write, so this is the outcome.

 

I stumbled and fell over the words as you sung,

And to every sweet nothing I clung,

From the verse to the chorus,

Every word spoken was true of us,

True believers brought together by fate,

Finally free of our day old hate,

Our broken hearts from the past,

Now mending each other’s at last,

The idea of love seemed far away,

Until we met that bitter winter day,

That bitter winter day,

Will never fade away.

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  1.    Steve Mendoza said,

    on October 17th, 2011 at 3:39 pm

    Kind of o.k…but I think I’m a bit worse in coming up for a love poem thats for class instead for a girl.

    Nice form on it.

    I think winter is a romantic season

  2.    jenny abeles said,

    on October 18th, 2011 at 7:34 pm

    winter is romantic, but it’s not a season naturally associated with love and romance. Your final couplet:
    That bitter winter day,

    Will never fade away.
    actually sounds negative. Wouldn’t we desire bitterness to fade, and winter to shift back into spring, the season most traditionally associated with love, courting, and marriage? What is holding up the cyclical flow of the seasons? The rest of the poem seems to be about getting over heartbreak, healing old wounds, and yet it ends with one day everlasting, and not just any day, but a “bitter winter day.” Is this something to consider while revising the poem?

    You’ve got a promising start here!

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